There are many causes of air pollution witch are environment factors, human factors, and lifestyles.
The main idea 1: environment factors
- smoking from fires
- volcanoes
main idea 2 : human factors
- smoking come out from the cars
- factories
main idea 3: life style
- planting trees in the desert to increase the oxygen
- use green buildings and cars
7. Write and edit your draft (90%) Oct 15-19
Air Pollution Nowadays, all around the world we live carelessly and luxuriously, without a single thought regarding what harmful effects our life methods would do to our little green home we call earth. Air pollution is one of the most destructive outcomes of our inconsiderate lifestyles, it occurs when gasses, dust and fume levels in the atmosphere increase to the point that endangers our lives, the lives of other creatures among us and the planet. Some types of air pollution can damage the atmosphere causing global warming and climate changes as well! It can affect water levels in the oceans or even cause total drought at some parts of the world. There are two main causes of air pollution; environmental factors and human factors, so scientists have been trying to solve this problem for many years.
Air pollution is caused by numerous reasons, some of them are factors that we can control, and others we cannot, due to the fact that they can be created by the environment itself such as: smoke from fires and volcanoes, radioactive materials. Decomposition of organic matter or even sand storms can cause air pollution. On the other hand there's the unnatural causes of air pollution or bad air quality. For example, the smoke coming out of cars, planes, trains, factories, power generating stations, homes, office buildings, weapons, air conditioning, spry cans, cutting down trees and the list goes on. These reasons have serious affect on our health in general and it can be lethal in the long term if not dealt with urgently (Natural Resources Defense Council). Risk factors concerning air pollution are many, whether it was from polluting the plants or altering the soil in the ground or inhaling bad air directly, it'll always find a way to affect our health or the environment. Some people they make the pollution by different ways such as: smoking, cars, burn papers, or by driving cars. Different studies have been made that shows an increasing rate of asthma and allergies among children all over the world. On the other hand, more adults are being diagnosed with throat or lung cancer every year, more than they ever did 10 years ago that shows an obvious increase in respiratory diseases even among non-smoking people ( Vineis,P and Husgafveel,K )
Looking for a solution to this dangerous problem endangering our world, researchers and scientist have made lots of studies regarding this topic, causes and solutions, and whether if they can alternate people's lifestyles or not is completely up to them. Trying to save the planet, the causes of air pollution should be avoided but the first step in treating this crises or anything is learning and prevention, lectures and campaigns can be thrown all over the world to raise awareness of the dangerous facts regarding air pollution, then teach them how to stop it while giving them replacements for the parts they're planning to change in their lives. For example, walking to work, to the drug store or the grocery will have positive results on your health and the plant at the same time. Another step is planting trees in deserts to increase carbon dioxide absorption and oxygen levels in the air, it can also stabilize the sand which will decrease sand storms and decrease allergies or asthma attacks. The 3rd step is using green buildings and cars, green buildings depend on sunlight mostly instead of fuel to run electrical energy and have glass walls that can keep people from using electricity as much as they used to. One more step is Recycling. Recycling is one of the most effective solutions to keep our air clean, because garbage or waste causes gasses and odors that can result in a great deal of damage to the atmosphere in general, especially if you conceder the large amounts of trash in dumpsters, and recycling all that is a great way to prevent any further risk on our planet. There are more ways to help our earth, one of them is quitting smoking, since the smoker is not only harming his self but he's putting others in danger including his family and friends, not to mention anyone who walks past him is being at risk. It also affects the Ozone layer exactly like spray cans. ( Bhatti, S ) In conclusion, air pollution is one of the most dangerous and harmful outcomes of our lifestyle. It endangers our health by threatening our lives and everything around us. Most people they didn’t take it as a real or serious problem, but with education and spreading awareness among people in different ages, teaching them causes, effects, methods of preventing air pollution and raising our young children to healthy habits throughout their daily lives, that way, we can insure a safe environment, a clean air, and a brighter future for our beloved ones.
Summary of “What are the causes and solutions of air pollution?” written by TK
According to the research paper, human beings face with the danger of air pollution which do damages to health of them and destroys the earth. Air pollution results in 2 main factors; environmental reasons of nature and human factors. First, a variety of natural factors such as explosion of volcanos, sand storm and radioactive materials cause air pollution. Second, the lifestyles of human beings promote the level of contamination. For example, cars’ gas and burning garbage are recognized as main reasons. In conclusion, the writer shows 4 solutions; generating awareness of dangerous situation in our society, planting trees in deserts, using ecological energy and recycling materials as much as possible. Our lifestyles promote air pollution badly and the situation endangers our health. It is time when human beings think about the problem earnestly and take action to save the bright future for our children.
Critical Commentary written by Sakae
Structure
I think the thesis of this paper is understandable. The writer shows clear main points and sufficient resources to solve air pollution. However, if the concrete examples such as data of the level of air pollution or the places facing with the effects are shown, it gets better. And he has to insert the sources in sentences.
Context
If the writer uses more linking words effectively, it will become clearer, more coherent sentences. For example, the first sentence of the 2nd paragraph is too long to read. It should be divided. In another point, the third paragraph contains the effect of the pollution and occupies half of paragraph. The writer had better emphasize on the causes along with his thesis.
Grammar
There are some mistakes of using comma. For example, he wrote A, B, and C. But, A, B and C is correct. In the first paragraph, the mistake of adjective clause exists. As for the sentence of “it occurs when gasses, dust…..”, he wrote “ increase to the point that it endangers our lives”. But “it ” is not necessary for this sentence.
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Table of Contents
Steps to writing a research essay
1. Choose a topic (Oct 4)
Air Pollution on Prezi
2. Post a working outline (2%) Oct
there are many things can caused air pollution such as: envoi.
3. Find keywords (1%) Oct 5
1- Smoking 2-wood and pulp processors 3-paper mills 4-refineries and chemical production
5- Cars 6- population 7-waste 8- Gas 9- carbon 10- dust 11- Volcanic Ash 12- Nitrogen 13- Paint 14- Smog 15- Ozone
4. Find and evaluate 2-3 web sources (3%) Oct 9
5. Find 2 academic sources from Google Scholar (2%) Oct.
6. Revise your outline (2%) Oct 12
The main idea 1: environment factors
- smoking from fires
- volcanoes
main idea 2 : human factors
- smoking come out from the cars
- factories
main idea 3: life style
- planting trees in the desert to increase the oxygen
- use green buildings and cars
7. Write and edit your draft (90%) Oct 15-19
Air Pollution
Nowadays, all around the world we live carelessly and luxuriously, without a single thought regarding what harmful effects our life methods would do to our little green home we call earth. Air pollution is one of the most destructive outcomes of our inconsiderate lifestyles, it occurs when gasses, dust and fume levels in the atmosphere increase to the point that endangers our lives, the lives of other creatures among us and the planet. Some types of air pollution can damage the atmosphere causing global warming and climate changes as well! It can affect water levels in the oceans or even cause total drought at some parts of the world. There are two main causes of air pollution; environmental factors and human factors, so scientists have been trying to solve this problem for many years.
Air pollution is caused by numerous reasons, some of them are factors that we can control, and others we cannot, due to the fact that they can be created by the environment itself such as: smoke from fires and volcanoes, radioactive materials. Decomposition of organic matter or even sand storms can cause air pollution. On the other hand there's the unnatural causes of air pollution or bad air quality. For example, the smoke coming out of cars, planes, trains, factories, power generating stations, homes, office buildings, weapons, air conditioning, spry cans, cutting down trees and the list goes on. These reasons have serious affect on our health in general and it can be lethal in the long term if not dealt with urgently ( Natural Resources Defense Council).
Risk factors concerning air pollution are many, whether it was from polluting the plants or altering the soil in the ground or inhaling bad air directly, it'll always find a way to affect our health or the environment. Some people they make the pollution by different ways such as: smoking, cars, burn papers, or by driving cars. Different studies have been made that shows an increasing rate of asthma and allergies among children all over the world. On the other hand, more adults are being diagnosed with throat or lung cancer every year, more than they ever did 10 years ago that shows an obvious increase in respiratory diseases even among non-smoking people ( Vineis,P and Husgafveel,K )
Looking for a solution to this dangerous problem endangering our world, researchers and scientist have made lots of studies regarding this topic, causes and solutions, and whether if they can alternate people's lifestyles or not is completely up to them. Trying to save the planet, the causes of air pollution should be avoided but the first step in treating this crises or anything is learning and prevention, lectures and campaigns can be thrown all over the world to raise awareness of the dangerous facts regarding air pollution, then teach them how to stop it while giving them replacements for the parts they're planning to change in their lives. For example, walking to work, to the drug store or the grocery will have positive results on your health and the plant at the same time. Another step is planting trees in deserts to increase carbon dioxide absorption and oxygen levels in the air, it can also stabilize the sand which will decrease sand storms and decrease allergies or asthma attacks. The 3rd step is using green buildings and cars, green buildings depend on sunlight mostly instead of fuel to run electrical energy and have glass walls that can keep people from using electricity as much as they used to. One more step is Recycling. Recycling is one of the most effective solutions to keep our air clean, because garbage or waste causes gasses and odors that can result in a great deal of damage to the atmosphere in general, especially if you conceder the large amounts of trash in dumpsters, and recycling all that is a great way to prevent any further risk on our planet. There are more ways to help our earth, one of them is quitting smoking, since the smoker is not only harming his self but he's putting others in danger including his family and friends, not to mention anyone who walks past him is being at risk. It also affects the Ozone layer exactly like spray cans. ( Bhatti, S )
In conclusion, air pollution is one of the most dangerous and harmful outcomes of our lifestyle. It endangers our health by threatening our lives and everything around us. Most people they didn’t take it as a real or serious problem, but with education and spreading awareness among people in different ages, teaching them causes, effects, methods of preventing air pollution and raising our young children to healthy habits throughout their daily lives, that way, we can insure a safe environment, a clean air, and a brighter future for our beloved ones.
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Summary written by Sakae
Summary of “What are the causes and solutions of air pollution?” written by TK
According to the research paper, human beings face with the danger of air pollution which do damages to health of them and destroys the earth. Air pollution results in 2 main factors; environmental reasons of nature and human factors. First, a variety of natural factors such as explosion of volcanos, sand storm and radioactive materials cause air pollution. Second, the lifestyles of human beings promote the level of contamination. For example, cars’ gas and burning garbage are recognized as main reasons. In conclusion, the writer shows 4 solutions; generating awareness of dangerous situation in our society, planting trees in deserts, using ecological energy and recycling materials as much as possible. Our lifestyles promote air pollution badly and the situation endangers our health. It is time when human beings think about the problem earnestly and take action to save the bright future for our children.
Critical Commentary written by Sakae
- Structure
I think the thesis of this paper is understandable. The writer shows clear main points and sufficient resources to solve air pollution. However, if the concrete examples such as data of the level of air pollution or the places facing with the effects are shown, it gets better. And he has to insert the sources in sentences.- Context
If the writer uses more linking words effectively, it will become clearer, more coherent sentences. For example, the first sentence of the 2nd paragraph is too long to read. It should be divided. In another point, the third paragraph contains the effect of the pollution and occupies half of paragraph. The writer had better emphasize on the causes along with his thesis.- Grammar
There are some mistakes of using comma. For example, he wrote A, B, and C. But, A, B and C is correct. In the first paragraph, the mistake of adjective clause exists. As for the sentence of “it occurs when gasses, dust…..”, he wrote “ increase to the point that it endangers our lives”. But “it ” is not necessary for this sentence.